Alone in the abandoned house, Jen shivered.
Before her, the past was forever stuck on replay. The woman’s screams were silenced first; the man then turned the gun on himself. “I’m sorry, love.”
An acrid smell filled the room as they disappeared.
Jen wept as the scene began again.
Author’s note: This was written for this week’s YeahWrite Microprose challenge, which prompted writers to craft a spooky story in exactly 49 words without using words like “ghost”, “haunt”, “spirit”, “fright”, “chill”, “eerie”, or any variation of them. Writing a complete story in 49 words is tougher than it sounds! Thanks for reading!
This is a great, self-contained little scene. Nicely done!
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Thanks so much! That 49-word limit was HARD!
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You’re telling me! 🙂 I struggled a whole bunch myself!
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Now the scene plays nonstop in my head 🙂
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Haha – thanks for reading!
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Again I’m impressed that you are so good at this! Way to go Cindy!!
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Thanks so much, Pam! 🙂
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Nice tight little scene. It’s a haunted house all right. It’s so hard with 49 words, isn’t it?!
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Thank you! Oh my gosh, yes. Thanks for reading!
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This is the definition of hell. Creepy!
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Thanks for reading and commenting!
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To be trapped in such a house, I feel so sorry for Jen.
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Me too! Thanks for reading it!
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That would not be the way I’d want to spend the afterlife. Ye gods!
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Same! Thanks for reading and commenting!
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How horrible that it keeps replaying!
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Yeah, I guess I went with horror instead of just writing a spooky tale.
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Oh, it’s both!
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Good horror. Horrible to be trapped in this scene.
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Thanks!
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The thought of this scene on an endless repeat loop is so disconcerting!
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Yes it is!
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